增强英语语句表现力的遥方法多年来遥四、六遥英语作文考试，考生作文成绩欠佳的主要原因除了遥遥和连贯遥差之外，语句软弱无力也是不容忽略的一个方面。
因此在英语写作教学中，如何增强语句表现力的问题必须引起我们足够的重视，以提高学生写作的表达质量。
为此，笔者结合自己的写作经验，提出了一些切实可行的遥做法，供广大英语学习者参考借鉴。


一、避遥遥语意弱的“be”动词。


　　1、把句中的表语转换为不同的修饰语。
例如：

　　Weak: The trees are bare.
The grass is brown.
The landscape seems drab.
Revision:The brown grass and bare trees form a drab landscape.
(转换为前置定语)

　　Or: The landscape, bare and brown, begged for spring green.
(转换为并列结构作后置定语)

　　2、将作表语用的形容词或名词变为行为动词。
例如：

　　1) Weak: The team members are good players.


　　Revision: The team members play well.


　　2) Weak: One worker's plan is the elimination of tardiness.


　　Revision: One worker's plan eliminates tardiness.


　　3、在以“here”或“there”开头的句子中，把“be”动词后的名词代词变成改写句的主语。
例如：

　　1) Weak: There is no opportunity for promotion.


　　Revision: No opportunity for promotion exists.


　　2) Weak: Here are the books you ordered.


　　Revision: The books you ordered have arrived.


　　二、多用语意具体的动词，保持句意简洁明了。
例如：

　　1、Poor: My supervisor went past my desk.


　　Better: My supervisor sauntered (=walked slowly) past my desk.


　　2、Poor: She is a careful shopper.


　　Better: She compares prices and quality.


　　三、尽量运用主动语态。
例如：

　　1、Weak: The organization has been supported by charity.


　　Better: Charity has supported the organization.


　　2、Weak: The biscuits were stacked on a plate.
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　　Better: Mother stacked the biscuits on a plate.


　　四、防止遥语意冗长累赘的词语。
例如：

　　1、Wordy: My little sister has a preference for chocolate milk.


　　Improved: My little sister prefers chocolate milk.


　　2、Wordy: We are in receipt of your letter and intend to follow

　　your recommendations.


　　Improved: We have received your letter and intended to follow your recommendation.


　　3、Redundant: We had a serious crisis at school yesterday when our chemistry laboratory caught fire.


　　Improved: We had a crisis at school yesterday when our chemistry laboratory caught fire.


　　4、Redundant: My sister and I bought the same, identical dress in different stores.


　　Improved: My sister and I bought the same dress in different stores.


　　五、杜遥滥用陈旧词语或难懂的遥术语。
例如：

　　1、Weak: They will not agree to his proposals in any shape or form.


　　Improved: They will not agree to any of his proposals.


　　2、Weak: I need her financial input before I can guesstimate our expenditures next fall.


　　Improved: I need her financial figures before I can estimate our expenditures next fall.